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« on: May 08, 2012, 12:27:54 PM »
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*Copypasta*
Final Destination - Demolition Derby
Yeah, I got bored one night and decided I'd write a Final Destination fanfic. Set just like the other 5: Opening disaster and everyone dies, just a premonition, saves people, they start to die, blah blah blah, you know the drill. So yeah, I thought I'd post the basics of it here and when I have some time I'll draw out the characters.
~~~CHARACTERS~~~
MAIN CHARACTER
Jason Bronx - Male 24
OTHER CHARACTERS (In order of premonition death)
Katy Wilkinson - Female 24
Dani West - Female 20
Harry Davies - Male 21
Cameron Davies - Male 21
Li Shan - Female 24
Sean Thomas - Male 23
Niall Black - Male 22
Nathe Franklin - Male 22
~~~OPENING DISASTER~~~
At a building site a girder is being lifter by a crane, the arm snaps and the girder falls, killing some. The crane falls onto a pile of barrels of oil and explodes, killing the rest.
(In order)
Katy - Chest crushed by the falling girder.
Dani - Impaled by the rods of the crane that fell off.
Harry - Impaled by the rods of the crane that fell off.
Cameron - Bludgeoned by flying tools after the barrels explode.
Li - Crushed by flying concrete blocks.
Sean - Impaled by flying pipe.
Niall - Incinerated in blast.
Nathe - Incinerated in blast.
Jason - Flung backwards and bisected by sheetmetal.
~~~POST PREMONITION DEATHS~~~
Katy – Drowns when motorized pool cover closes over the pool, leaving her trapped.
Dani – Neck broked when ladder shuts on it.
Harry – Tie caught in belt sander, gets head ground up.
Cameron – Trips on a bit of wood and gets stabbed through eye by the handle on a vice.
Li – SAVED – Was going to be hit by tiles falling off the sports stand, pushed to safety.
Sean – Shot through head by javelin.
Niall – Head smashed by falling brick.
~~~SECOND PREMONITION~~~
On the motorway/freeway (wherever you live) an 18-wheeler's tyre bursts, sending the tyre flying backwards.
Li – Crushed when tyre debris smashes through the windscreen.
Nathe – Dies when car rolls.
Jason – Still alive to see a bus speeding towards him.
When Jason sees the second premonition he tells Nathe to pull onto the lane at the end to stop, instead of preventing the disaster it is actually the start. Had he not started to switch lanes they would've lived.
What do you think? Do any of the deaths need tweaking to make them better? Want to change a death completely or add a new character? Leave a comment! ^.^
*Goes back*
*Copypasta*
Final Destination - Demolition Derby
Yeah, I got bored one night and decided I'd write a Final Destination fanfic. Set just like the other 5: Opening disaster and everyone dies, just a premonition, saves people, they start to die, blah blah blah, you know the drill. So yeah, I thought I'd post the basics of it here and when I have some time I'll draw out the characters.
~~~CHARACTERS~~~
MAIN CHARACTER
Jason Bronx - Male 24
OTHER CHARACTERS (In order of premonition death)
Katy Wilkinson - Female 24
Dani West - Female 20
Harry Davies - Male 21
Cameron Davies - Male 21
Li Shan - Female 24
Sean Thomas - Male 23
Niall Black - Male 22
Nathe Franklin - Male 22
~~~OPENING DISASTER~~~
At a building site a girder is being lifter by a crane, the arm snaps and the girder falls, killing some. The crane falls onto a pile of barrels of oil and explodes, killing the rest.
(In order)
Katy - Chest crushed by the falling girder.
Dani - Impaled by the rods of the crane that fell off.
Harry - Impaled by the rods of the crane that fell off.
Cameron - Bludgeoned by flying tools after the barrels explode.
Li - Crushed by flying concrete blocks.
Sean - Impaled by flying pipe.
Niall - Incinerated in blast.
Nathe - Incinerated in blast.
Jason - Flung backwards and bisected by sheetmetal.
~~~POST PREMONITION DEATHS~~~
Katy – Drowns when motorized pool cover closes over the pool, leaving her trapped.
Dani – Neck broked when ladder shuts on it.
Harry – Tie caught in belt sander, gets head ground up.
Cameron – Trips on a bit of wood and gets stabbed through eye by the handle on a vice.
Li – SAVED – Was going to be hit by tiles falling off the sports stand, pushed to safety.
Sean – Shot through head by javelin.
Niall – Head smashed by falling brick.
~~~SECOND PREMONITION~~~
On the motorway/freeway (wherever you live) an 18-wheeler's tyre bursts, sending the tyre flying backwards.
Li – Crushed when tyre debris smashes through the windscreen.
Nathe – Dies when car rolls.
Jason – Still alive to see a bus speeding towards him.
When Jason sees the second premonition he tells Nathe to pull onto the lane at the end to stop, instead of preventing the disaster it is actually the start. Had he not started to switch lanes they would've lived.
What do you think? Do any of the deaths need tweaking to make them better? Want to change a death completely or add a new character? Leave a comment! ^.^
Love the new bot, like everyone else is saying I'd try to shrink it down a bit. Looks like a lag moster, is it?
